For Sharif, your most beautiful line was in the final pharagraph.The way that you connected with Nadia is very interesting. It is as if with every question you asked you getting closer and closer with her. What really stood out to me was how you connected the way Nadia was acting to the way Morrie from the book "Tuesdays with morrie" was acting. The quote "i realized that nadia who once moved her hands around as she would tell me stories no longer does that (similar to Morrie in Tuesdays with Morrie)." Made me realize that you noticed every little detail about nadia and thus by doing that you were able to connect this to Morrie.
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For Arden, That whole piece was really good and you put so much depth into your work. What really stood out to me is how your great grandmother is 96 year old and still in breathing. The quote, "I partially screamed when I told her about school, my unit about dying. Remembering what my dad had said I tried to change the subject, but I found that she did not mind talking about it." Also stood out to me because your grandmother was so open and was willing to answer alot of questions about illness and dying. This made me realize that there are people in this world that except dying and dont make it a negative experience.
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